Lỗi quan điểm không rõ ràng (unclear position) trong IELTS Writing Task 2

I. LỖI QUAN ĐIỂM KHÔNG RÕ RÀNG (UNCLEAR POSITION)

– Lỗi quan điểm không rõ ràng (unclear position) là lỗi đưa ra một quan điểm cá nhân khiến người đọc cảm thấykhó hiểu và bối rối. Có hai lý do chính cho việc này:

• Quan điểm của tác giả không rõ ràng
• Quan điểm đó chưa được phát triển bằng các luận điểm rõ ràng

– Từ position xuất hiện nhiều lần trong tiêu chí đánh giá IELTS Writing Task 2, cụ thể là tiêu chí Task Achievement.

• Band 9: “presents a fully developed position”
• Band 7: “presents a clear position throughout the response”
• Band 6: “presents a relevant position”
• Band 5: “expresses a position”
• Band 4: “presents a position but this is unclear”
• Band 3: “does not express a clear position”
• Band 2: “does not express a position”

II. 3 BÍ QUYẾT KHẮC PHỤC LỖI QUAN ĐIỂM KHÔNG RÕ RÀNG (UNCLEAR POSITION)

– Hãy ghi nhớ 3 bí quyết sau khi viết bài IELTS Writing Task 2: 

• Quyết định quan điểm muốn thể hiện và trình bày quan điểm đó rõ ràng.
• Sử dụng đại từ nhân xưng (personal pronouns) để thể hiện quan điểm ​​của bạn: I believe // I am convinced that … // I would argue for,… [có “I” vào khi nói về personal opinion của mình].
• Luôn bám sát quan điểm của bạn xuyên suốt bài viết.

III. MỘT SỐ VÍ DỤ VỀ LỖI QUAN ĐIỂM KHÔNG RÕ RÀNG (UNCLEAR POSITION) VÀ CÁCH KHẮC PHỤC

TOPIC 01: The internet is the best place to find information. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

INTRODUCTION: The network of networks is the best platform for gaining knowledge. In my opinion, I completely agree with the given statement because the internet has become a convenient source of information on various subjects in our modern world. [introduction viết là hoàn toàn đồng ý với việc “the best place to find information”]

CONCLUSION: To summarize, I agree that the internet is the most useful resource for gathering information; however, there are some disadvantages to be concerned, making other sources of information more realiable than the Internet in some cases. [conclusion lại nói khác, không còn là “the best place”] As a result, society is advised to use available information on websites intelligently or face the consequences.

TOPIC 02: Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

THESIS STATEMENT 01 – INEFFECTIVE // UNABLE TO SHOW YOUR CLEAR POSITION

In the modern workplace, dress codes are changing as employers focus more on results than on the rules that employees must follow. There are strong arguments for both points of view.

THESIS STATEMENT 02 – EFFECTIVE // SHOW YOUR CLEAR POSITION – TOTALLY AGREE

Thesis statement: In the modern workplace, dress codes are changing as employers focus more on results than on the rules that employees must follow. I completely agree with the view that workers should be judged on their work alone, and that they should be allowed to dress however they want.

Body Paragraphs: the first reason & the second reason

[UNCLEAR POSITION] Conclusion: In conclusion, based on the discussed importance of imposing company dress codes, I am convinced that it is advisable for companies to make uniform compulsory at the workplace.

[CLEAR POSITION] Conclusion: In conclusion, based on the discussed importance of giving the freedom of outfit choice to workers, I am convinced that it is advisable for companies to impose relaxed dress codes at the workplace.

THESIS STATEMENT 03 – EFFECTIVE // SHOW YOUR CLEAR POSITION – PARTICALLY AGREE

Thesis statement: In the modern workplace, dress codes are changing as employers focus more on results than on the rules that employees must follow. While I agree that the way people dress should be seen as irrelevant in many work contexts, I believe that dress codes still exist for good reasons in certain professions. 

Body Paragraphs: par 01 (fields in which uniform is important) & par 02 (fields in which employees should be allowed to get dressed freely)

Conclusion: In conclusion, it is advisable for fields paying heed to workers’ appearance to require employees to wear a uniform, whereas employees in creative ones should be given complete autonomy in choosing their outfits. Therefore, the question of whether a specific company should care about their employees’ attires depends on its characteristic.

TOPIC 03: Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.